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Death stalked across the land, relentless with his pace,
enjoyment nor pain ever etched across his face.
A single glance was all that was called for
to part mortal men from this plane forever more.
One day he came upon an unknown sight,
a woman, young woman, bathed in celestial light.
She glowed as she stroked the earth with her hand,
coaxing buds, vines, flowers, fruit from the land.
At first his instinct was as it always had been,
he is the embodiment of the very first sin.
Then, as she stroked, she began to sing,
her golden voice flowed with summer and spring.
As she sang, he felt something begin to shift,
he felt his spirit and visage start to lift.
For the first time since he had come to this plane,
he did not feel the need to cause mortals pain.
She stood, guiding sunflowers up to the sky,
singing to encourage them to learn to fly.
He slowly slid forward, nervous steps across the land,
and with a rapid beating heart, softly took her hand.
She turned and smiled, eyes sprinkled with dew,
"I've been waiting a very long time for you."
He apologized, as a gentleman always should,
and then, kissed her hand as gently as he could...
enjoyment nor pain ever etched across his face.
A single glance was all that was called for
to part mortal men from this plane forever more.
One day he came upon an unknown sight,
a woman, young woman, bathed in celestial light.
She glowed as she stroked the earth with her hand,
coaxing buds, vines, flowers, fruit from the land.
At first his instinct was as it always had been,
he is the embodiment of the very first sin.
Then, as she stroked, she began to sing,
her golden voice flowed with summer and spring.
As she sang, he felt something begin to shift,
he felt his spirit and visage start to lift.
For the first time since he had come to this plane,
he did not feel the need to cause mortals pain.
She stood, guiding sunflowers up to the sky,
singing to encourage them to learn to fly.
He slowly slid forward, nervous steps across the land,
and with a rapid beating heart, softly took her hand.
She turned and smiled, eyes sprinkled with dew,
"I've been waiting a very long time for you."
He apologized, as a gentleman always should,
and then, kissed her hand as gently as he could...
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This poem is inspired partly by my boyfriend and partly by my Greek Culture class and partly by my own feelings of romance.
I hope you enjoy it and I would like come critiques if you would be so kind, my dear readers. Thank you.
This poem is inspired partly by my boyfriend and partly by my Greek Culture class and partly by my own feelings of romance.
I hope you enjoy it and I would like come critiques if you would be so kind, my dear readers. Thank you.
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This is actually a very good piece...I though more people would have commented on it! I can definitely see where you took your own experiences and your Greek culture lessons and incorporated them to make a lovely piece. Its a cute story, and I could see everything pan out. If you wanted to make it more "grown-up", rhyming wouldnt be needed, but it wouldnt be the same without that key feature, so I wouldnt change it, at least not on this poem. I love how you put hints of nature in the song as well, probably to not only help with imagery but the mood as well. One of my teachers own said that grammar doesnt matter as much in poetry, and poems often work better when there isnt a lot of words clustering around the poem. I see one or two words you could get rid of, but, dont bother if it will ruin how the piece flows. Keep up the good work, and if you actually read my entire comment, thank you for listening!